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Re: Colored in Light
Hii! Wow, what a take on space travel! Makes me never want to go up there, however beautiful this love story is. Let's get right into it. Big picture, I ...
Sep 29, 2023 -
Re: The Main Character Syndrome of Aynnhailleah Angel Astrid: Episode 1.2
HAHA the anime vibes. “I’m never washing them again.” I'm going to spin a little yarn here and suggest that it would be extremely cool if you have an unreliable ...
Sep 28, 2023 -
Re: A Walk in the Woods
Hey! I figured I'd take a look-see at part one, so here we go: Maybe it just took some time to settle more into the sparse, child-like writing, or maybe ...
Sep 28, 2023 -
Re: Catfish for Dinner
Hii! Just stopping by for a quick Revmo review. Not gonna lie, I was kind of hoping for some noodling, but this was cute! Like farq4d already said, you do ...
Sep 28, 2023 -
Re: Round and Round Chapter 2
Hi there! Just stopping by for a quick revmo review. Let's get into it: I poked around in your portfolio for chapter one, so I'm not coming into this blind. ...
Sep 28, 2023 -
Re: Shadow's Rising Chapter 10 (V0)
Oooooh prophecy! Great poem, by the way. While the rhythm and meter aren't perfect, you did an overall good job sticking as closely as you could to them, and the ...
Sep 28, 2023 -
Re: Peonies in December
Heyyy! What a nice little meet-cute. You mention that you wrote this for a class, so I'd be curious to see what the prompt is, but since I don't have ...
Sep 28, 2023 -
Re: Shadow's Rising Chapter 9 (part 2)
Heyy! Back for yet more dragons. So, I've been trying to put my finger on the thing that would really elevate your action from good to great. Like I've said, ...
Sep 28, 2023 -
Re: The Enlightenment Period
Hi! Unfortunately I am not an English teacher like Ayumi here, but hopefully I can offer some insight for you. From what I can tell, this is in a pretty ...
Sep 27, 2023 -
Re: there's something wrong with me
Hey! Saw you'd followed up to the Salt and Straw story and thought I'd swing by again. I'm not sure if it was your intent, but one of the first ...
Sep 27, 2023 -
Re: Shadow's Rising Chapter 9 (part1)
Heyaaa back again. So I've got two things for you this chapter. First, thanks for the reminder that dragons have good noses haha. I think if that is a significant ...
Sep 27, 2023 -
Re: Shadow's Rising Chapter 8
Ten bucks says something will force him to go with the other dragonets. Poor Shadow. Alrighty. Let's talk about dialogue tags! In case you don't know, dialogue tags are the ...
Sep 27, 2023 -
Re: Shadow's Rising Chapter 7 (part 2)
Heyyy! Back again. Obviously Scorch is a horrible dragon, but I think you did a great job with playing that out through his thoughts and dialogue. Now the next step ...
Sep 26, 2023 -
Re: Shadow's Rising Chapter 7 (part 1)
Heya! Just swinging by for a quick revmo review. I went back and read all the previous parts, so hopefully I can offer some worthwhile critique. Out of curiosity... were ...
Sep 26, 2023 -
Re: Neath Juniper's Fern
Heyyy! Thank you for tagging me
Sep 26, 2023