Venom

I am just going to dive right into edits, and I'll give a general impression at the end of this post, 'kay? Which poses the question of why I am ...

First of all, I'd just like to see that I liked this piece a lot. I thoroughly enjoy flash fiction. Anyway, as a previous reviewer said, the way you started ...

Let me begin with saying that it is extremely rare for stories on this website to catch my attention. I usually only read them halfway before giving up, yet with ...

Though it isn't complete, I thoroughly enjoyed it. It was definitely told.. differently than most, but it was enjoyable, nonetheless. I didn't spot any punctuation or grammatical errors. The one ...

I am going to nitpick. Things in bold are my changes. As my two friends and I pushed through the front doors of our school comma I suddenly felt a ...

In the dim light, I could see that my brown eyes where a bright shimmering blue. It should be were. Someone came into existence behind me, there face above my ...

I am just going to dive right in. “Y-yes , my lord.” There should be a comma between yes and my lord. Also, I believe a question mark would be ...

“No, I don’t mind coming down here, Beca . Don’t get the wrong idea. I haven’t seen you in… what’s it been now?” I believe you are missing a C. ...

Oh, my! I am so very happy for you! You really deserved this opportunity. Anyways, on to what I thought about this piece. I really liked James, but that little ...

Sweetness. I loved it. I'm so happy you posted this chapter so quickly. I didn't see anything that needed to be fixed. Like always. As I said on Chapter 16, ...

Ann needs to be slapped in the face. I hate her so much. I have never hated a character in a story as much as I hate Ann right now. ...

I pursed my lips, slamming my locker shut and turning to face her. This sentence sounds really weird to me. I feel like you changed tense. No other else will ...

I am in love. Your writing, especially with By Sun, By Moon, leaves me speechless. I am also very touched that you posted this for me, I was waiting ever ...

Here we go: Grumbling, I lifted my hood to cover my hair and shoved my hands up into my sleeves of my sweatshirts. I believe it should be the instead ...

Perfection. Flawless. Well-written. Attention grabbing. Those are only a few words to describe your writing. Your writing is truly the best I have ever read on YWS. I would not ...