Vasticity

This is very nice. I see where you're coming from with this poem, and I can relate a little. Partly, I agree with Tenyo. Make it a bit longer, cause ...

unlike most poems I review, yours actually has a beat to it for having mismatched amounts of words and syllables, so NICE JOB!!! *gives a gold star* :elephant: No more ...

First off, you need punctuation and capitalizing. For instance: then in the end hes happy and smiles then a bird poos on him. You're missing an apostrophe in the area ...

Hi. First off, this isn't the type of story that appeals to me, but I can see how it might be popular in the world with you kids and your ...

Well, I've certainly had these sorts of nights before, so I can like it more thoroughly due to my relation to the story at hand. I like the wording, the ...

I like the wording and what story you're trying to interpret, but sometimes, you have a first line that has 5 words, and then your next word has 9 or ...

I completely agree with Elinor in every way. I'm getting kind of sick of the whole cross-over movies/books with other movies/books. BUT! If you would put a little initiative into ...

Wow, this is deep, I have to be honest with you. I really like it, and you paint a clear picture of what you're interpreting with your words. I've read ...

It was pretty funny, it made me laugh. But, I have to be the big stickler, and show you how to make proper scripts. First off, this is not a ...

Nice job! You're very descriptive, making the story believable. You almost bring us into this world you've written out. There are a few issues, however. On numerous occasions, you do ...

awesome. Very descriptive, well thought out, and, most of all, truthful! Words can turn into anything with a little imagination, and you certainly seem to get the idea. Keep writing! ...

Strange and Interesting premise. This is an original idea, wrapped up with good description, excitement, tension, and realistic ideas. Make it longer!!! Keep on writing! :mrgreen:

Liked it! If you could specify who's talking when, that would be nice, though. Also, 'your heart's broken' is the line you were looking for at the end, just like ...

Wow. Very well done. An interesting plot and premise, good dialogue, and descriptions. There's only one problem that I can even see, even though you do it numerous times. We’ve ...

Let me just get started. I can feel the wind’s blowing all over the place It should be winds. Summer breeze and sunny sunshine We don't need that last part. ...