the finger growled at the toe and then bit it. the toe farted and then screamed and saw a biscuit. then the biscuit ran away. the finger walked home then a pack of camels with asthma and they were quite obese with facial acne snarled at them. then a meteor fell on them. the finger walked home but saw his house was on fire. he was doomed. years later the finger was homeless and every one spat at it. he then bought smelly shoes. he found money. but they were plastic. he was doomed again. he then met a girl. then she dissapeared. then he prayed.then a horse fell on him. then in the end hes happy and smiles then a bird poos on him.
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sorry i just dont understand how is this obsence or insultoing in any sense and who is this insulting its called imagination
First off, you need punctuation and capitalizing. For instance:
You're missing an apostrophe in the area in red. Also, you need to capitalize the beginning of every sentence. Second, what is the point of this story? It's nothing but jokes, jokes, jokes, and it's so convoluted that there's no purpose for it even existing. This is just plain insulting to three groups of people, who really can't help what they have. You can't base all your jokes on insulting people, violence, farting, and other obscene things. Also... You can't use the word And multiple times in a sentence. Instead, do this... The toe farted, then screamed, and saw a biscuit. I can't believe I just wrote that. If you want to get anywhere with comedy, making this story is not the place to start. All comedians say, make jokes about what you know. I doubt you know this... I hate to be so blunt. Keep writing... I guess.