Vanadis

Hi! For the record, it's hilarious even if you don't get it. I'm not even sure I'd think it was this funny if I got it. The mental images! Egads, ...

Hi there! Sooo you get my first critique that I've done in... forever! But first of all, as it looks like you've only been here about a month, welcome to ...

Nom nom nom, Hi Poet that I don't know! I'm Freyja, and let me say...this poem made me giggle. I love the subject matter: Love is toast, yes? I think ...

Oh, Snoinkers. *shakes head* I knew you'd be up to something, as soon as you started telling me all about those trashy romance novels, and here it is. This is ...

Oh dear, I think I've hurt myself. Do you want that on your conscience, interobang?! But, no...I laughed myself into a coughing fit and coughed more upon choking on a ...

Amy! Bahahahaha, oh dear. I did not know it was F.R.E.D. appreciation month...the more you know! This was quite funny. Eh, rhythm went kinda off here and there, but...who cares? ...

Hello there, Margaret Louise. The name's Freyja, and it's my pleasure to review you! First of all, I want to say I rather liked this. It's not an unheard of ...

Hey Razzker. Sorry it took me so long to get to this. Had some kinda bug that made me feel like I was dead. :/ Well, anyway, I'm here now! ...

'Ello there, Blackbird. Here as requested. (Sorry it took a bit, though.) I'm going to start with an in-line critique (which you'll find in the spoiler) and then I'll follow ...

Hey Ace! Here as requested. I'm going to do a line-by-line, and then I'll comment about it in general. Those light summer days passed Like apple tart and crème brulee, ...

Hey Kingolions. This...confused me. It's like a snippet of something that happens, and doesn't quite tell the whole story. The flow of tears fell like the swell of blood. They ...

Hey Kaywiia. O.o It's been since the 15th and no critique? Ack! I'll see what I can do, since I've been following this... A few of the other gang members ...

Hi, Horseradish! You're sort of newish, so welcome to YWS! Hope you're finding everything wonderful here. :D First off. I liked this. At first I found the slang in the ...

Hey Kyllorac! Here I am. Gah! This is good; really good. The images are really beautiful. You did really well, I think, in communicating the story. I know you gave ...

Heya. First of all, this is in the wrong place. It should be in lyrics, not lyric poetry. You could PM a mod or JM (green names) to move it ...