Published October 8, 2010
I will butter my own toast thank you
It’s my toast. I know just how I like it
So I will butter it
This used to be my view,
My automatic response whenever someone offered their butter
Then I tasted your butter and I didn’t mind so much
It’s not quite how I butter my toast but it’s just as good.
Do I dare to say better?
It’s that slap you on the face, knock it out of the park, send your letter, steal your breath, sweep completely under your toes, burn your dinner, butter your toast kind of butter
And you know what?
You can butter my toast anytime
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I really liked the theme of the poem. It's quite entertaining, 'Don't butter my toast'. Neatly done like a professional poet.
I would suggest that you write each sentence after a comma on a different line if you want. There is nothing wrong with the poetry though, it's amazing so keep it up.
This was just... wow! It was completely untraditional, and unconventional and odd and ... wonderful! I laughed from start to finish but it's just something everyone can relate to; even if you've conveyed the message in a very different way. Keep writing, and I'll keep reading!
hey!
keep going!
Just want to say that this is my type of poetry and well done.Vana covered everyhing I would say regarding punctuation etc. but otherwise this is a fantastic poem
DITR
So I thought this was a weird concept at first, but it's definatly interesting. I like it.
I'm not a good nittpicker, so I'm not going to deal with that. But, yeah, intreaging way to think of being original. Original way to think of being original.
:) 
Oh my goodness, I love this! Totally bizarre but fun! I'm not a huge poetry buff, but I adore this!
thank you for your kind reviews. Vanadin. you are appreciated. in reference to the punctuation i shall refer you to my first poem. Lightening in the common room. thank you for your time
Nom nom nom, Hi Poet that I don't know! I'm Freyja, and let me say...this poem made me giggle.
I love the subject matter: Love is toast, yes? I think that's what it is, anyway.
One thing I did notice is that there is some punctuation in there where it should be, and also none where there should be if you want to keep up this trend of punctuating your poetry. My advice:
Yup, as I said. I love how you set it up one way and end it with a sort of, "Well, I guess I was wrong...so let's go with it" decision.
Very creative, funny, cute, what-have-you. Unique. Only thing that I had any qualms about was the punctuation, so yay!
Well, here's saying that I'm not great at critiquing poetry, but that's my two cents.
Keep writing!
Hey,
I totally suck at reviewing poetry but I'd like you to see this, because it was the first thing I thought of when I saw the title: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=29sWHoDXuwI. By the way, even though I don't really understand it, nice poem!
~Jas
Wow; definitly an odd concept but I can see the metaphoric message between the lines. Its is a good poem as it is written simply to communicate an idea that is better understood that way. When I say simple I don't mean boring and grade-3 standard. In fact it is rather interesting and I like the way you have done it. Well done.
-Blossom xx