Vampy_Girl15

I loved the humor. Usually I don't like dream sequences at the beginning of a but I really enjoyed this. :D I hope you intend on continuing this. I can't ...

This would be a great alterative song! :D It's a pretty clear message and good writing. I'd love to hear what this would sound like! Keep writing. ~Rachael

I liked the vocabulary you used in this!(I like it when people use intelligent vocab.) :D This was a good start and I disagree with 'God'. It doesn't sound like ...

I don't think you should separate: She longs to enter It would sound better and less chopy if you connect them. Also saying 'She' 3 times in a row is ...

Medusa found all the mistakes I did so I can just tell you what I thought, which is still good. :D I liked your word choice. The poem flowed well. ...

I liked how you did the stanzas. Some people put it in just one block. I think you did good with the punctuation. :D All in all I like this. ...

I like how you let a little of the story unfold. I also like the descriptive words you use! I actually found nothing wrong with the sentence that Flame11 and ...

Woo! Werewolves! I like his seceret. I like that you chose to use 'goonies' it made me smile everytime I read it.:D This is coming along great! I can't wait ...

Keri looked at the guy surprised, and was about to ask him who they were, but she didn’t have time for they were already there. The girl glared at Keri ...

I didn't think it sounded very much like Stephine Meyer... I liked it alot. I'm really into vampires and this was a great take on them. will you be continuing ...

I love romances and this one is very interesting so far. I want to know what Ryder was going to say when he said: “Rules of th…” He stopped, “Of ...

It's a good concept but you got a little comma happy in some places. Just watch your punctuation.;) It's great and I can't wait to read more. Keep writing! ~Rachael

I agree this can't really be judged as a poem. I don't agree with Brad though...You shouldn't throw it away. It's a perfectly good piece of work. You could Change ...

It's a strong start. I enjoyed reading it, but as the others said there are a few punctuation errors. They aren't that bad though, easily fixed with the backspace key. ...

It's a great plot! I loved reading it and if it becomes a book i will be very interested in reading the rest; so keep up the good work. I ...