TylynRae

Ah, I loved this. The way you portrayed the moon, and talked about the tree, it just made sense to me. I loved how you made it seem as everything, ...

I hate to be the downer, but I didn't like it too much =[. Your grammar and punctuation didn't have any noticeable errors. And your sentence structure in general was ...

Ah, this is a really nice piece, even for its length. You have enough substance there to let us know whats going on, and at the same time not say ...

Heya Perdy =] I only had one big iff on this. And everything else was absolutely stunning. I think. The name Steve. Just sort of threw everything off. It just ...

Will not heal up for years. That line is one of the only ones where I wanted to change something. I don't think the Up is necessary, it disrupts the ...

Hey there again =] I have to agree with Solvey on this one. The start was a tad weak for me, but you went out with a bang. This was ...

Woah now. Now we're getting to the really good stuff =] This was a beautiful poem. I mean... wow. It made my heart sad at the end about the granddaughter ...

This poem was a bit more difficult to critique, free form always is. Anyway, the set up was a bit iffy for me. Free verse needs a really strong layout ...

Twisting, gnawing, boring, drilling Pain- is there something more filling? The rhythm was a tad off here. Love is fleeting, filled with sorrow, Pain is there, pain is tomorrow. Nothing ...

Yaaay! I love when you write pretties =] Anyway, I thought this was great. Its extremely catchy, and just has that feel to it. We don't have tons of things ...

So. You're probably going to hate me since I have nothing but praise for this piece. You were lucky to get such an intriguing topic, and you really made it ...

Hello there again. The same comments as before also work with this poem. This is a really powerful poem, and can stand alone without such a long explanation above. Your ...

Oh my gosh... I've yet to read any of your poetry to my knowledge, and this was really beautiful. Like the first reviewer, this puts you right in the scene, ...

Woahh, this was pretty eery feeling. You set a really nice scene for the readers, let us know exactly whats happening without it sounding like you were giving us instructions. ...

Hello there =] So I was a bit iffy on this. I liked where you were going with this. But I was a bit off at how you went about ...