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TylynRae

  • Poetry » Other, General Re: First kiss

    Hello there =]. Here to review a bit. The title had me a little shaky, since romancey things are usually not my thing. But anyway! I found a few grammatical ...

    May 21, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Eclipses

    Oh goodness. The title caught me a day or so ago, but internet was too stupid for me to open the topic and read it. But anyway, the imagery in ...

    May 21, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Before she raped him...

    Heyy there =]. So, I saw this in the new thingy category. And was like. What!?!? So I opened it and I sort of got hooked immediately. First off, THANK ...

    May 17, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: A Night Forgotten

    Oooh, very dark. I love it. I think that this piece was overall descent but probably would have made a much nicer short story. It was too short of a ...

    May 16, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Pretty Things

    heyy there =]. This honestly made me want to cry. Like a lot. And I think I only found one grammatical error. You said sneaked somewhere and it should have ...

    May 16, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: For the Boy Who Sits In Front of Me in Science

    It it weren't for the title I would have totally skipped over this. But rad sauce =]. I loved the overall gist, but the execution was a tad sloppy. I'd ...

    May 16, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Are you rejecting me?

    I really liked this. With most poetry I have to comment about the flow of the poem. But in this case it was fairly descent. I love how stuck up ...

    May 13, 2011
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: A Piece on Education

    Edits. Thouch, should be touch I think. And you say that you can have or two parents. One or two if I'm correct. Sorry I sort of just bashed those ...

    May 13, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The Perfect Girlfriend

    Woah. Okay, I really liked this. Like a lot. The overall message was fantastic and something that a lot of people will be able to relate to. The execution is ...

    May 13, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Double Bass

    Ooh finally, someone that refers to the cello =]. I really liked this a lot. It flowed nicely and the wording in general was very sophisticated and very very much ...

    May 11, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Realm of Insanity

    I'm not sure what to think of this, i agree with the first reviewer in that it seems much like a conversation, which makes it a very unconventional poem, which ...

    May 11, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: My Daddy, The General

    I really liked this piece. One because it was very well written and two because I can relate... so much that it overwhelms me the similarity between what I'm reading ...

    May 11, 2011
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Only for a moment

    Once again, this is great =]. But the last line sort of irks me a bit. It just doesn't flow well with the rest of it. You're lyrics are great, ...

    May 4, 2011
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: You

    I really loved verse four. it's like you just needed a body something warm that you could feel. I really enjoy that.It's a great line. The one qualm I have ...

    May 4, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Bloody Tears

    I had a few qualms with this. Firstly, the picture was a bit of a distraction, and took away the emphasis on the poem. Secondly, I'm not a fan of ...

    May 4, 2011


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