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This is cool! The rhyming goes very nicely. Only one thing: "And in the morn," continued she, "You'd find a frightful fact, For though asleep, we be the same, In ...

It sounds very nice, and the rhyming flows well, but . . . what does it mean? Sorry, but poetry isn't my forte, and I found this rather confusing. :oops: ...

Hum, good! Interesting twist at the end. It did take a bit of a long time to get to the point. This might put people off finishing it. He noticed ...

Haha! Very funny! I was first attracted by the title, then it was LOL! The way you say about this pastry gone bad in such a sad, sorrowful way, when ...

Eragon stinks. DO NOT get me started on all the parts in it that Paolini copied from Star Wars and LOTR - you'll want to sock me over the head ...

LOL at the ending! :lol: I don't think it was terribly badly written. “But , but, anyone could be on the other end!” stammered Carrie, You should add a dash ...

I like this! It's sad as well, the whole thing being caused by a book. Apart from the bad language, I think you missed some closing quotation marks. I saw ...

Short, but sweet. And it rhymes!!!!!! And it has rhythym!!!! I can never get either of those right. :D Is surfing fun? The thing is, I have a morbid streak, ...

Ow, confusing in some places, but Helen/Lily was a schizo-whatsit, right? Multiple personalities? It was well written, but the dialogue made it a bit confusing in some places before I ...

It's interesting, but as Vixeyt said, as Matilda got older and was actually using her brain properally in school, she lost her powers, cos her brain was exercising itself when ...

Um, that's...disturbing. I don't think there's any typos or anything, but then I was only skimming. The way you described Ms Ragnis as glaring at all the pets was good, ...

Neat-oh! I'm pushed for time right now, but: He did not answer; similar thoughts frequented his pwn mind. "own", right? Laughter snagged as his eardrums, "at" She raised an eyebrow ...

PLEASE DO THE GRAMMER AND SPACING THAT EVERYONE HAS COMMENTED ON!!!!! Please? I mean, I didn't even read all of it, because it was so squashed together, and the little ...

Cool! This is just a one-shot thing, right? I don't think there are any mistakes. The only thing that leapt out was: “And beating up your opponents.” said the voice, ...

Interesting, and I found the ending funny. :D But, if this is poetry, it ought to go more like a poem. Just telling a story and dividing it up into ...