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Kitty did a wonderful nitpick and saved me a job, as there were quite a few grammer thingies in here. But the idea and story were both great! Spooky... I ...

Yuh, new character. :) Do I smell a relationship-to-be between Brad and Keira? :wink:

She felt her inner grammar Nazi dying. :lol: :lol: What's with the [s]strikethru[/s] bit's though? I understand what you're doing, but it looks a bit untidy. Could you do it ...

I like Brownie best. :) “What about school?” H e asked, seated at the kitchen table. You do this several times! SMALL LETTER! h e prodded the stack of books ...

Nice action here. :) And good, Khor's coming to grips with stuff now. Knall glanced up to check and make sure the human had left , and turned around to ...

Mary is mad. Completely mad. She pulled out of the hug, and met her mothers blue-green eyes. Mothers = mother's. Look out mistakes like this as they snatch the reader's ...

Cool chapter and I like the Night Cats, nice and impressive. :) Deliberately turning her back to the breeze that carried the sounds of Brad's flight to them, she tucked ...

'Tis good. :) Just don't carry on saying about Creiha's "forest green eyes" so much, and try not to repeat names either. Otherwise, I'm enjoying this. ^_^ As for characters ...

Yhe, very good! (DUH.) “I need to return home,” Creiha murmured, leaning away from Strick and beginning to turn around. “Let go of me! Leave me here – I don’t ...

This actually happened? You get panic attacks? Sorry, that wasn't terribly diplomatic. Anyway, I thought that this was very good. It had feeling without laying the emotions on too thick. ...

Right. I wouldn't have thought raving and blubbing was Luke's style at all. And you ought to make it clearer who he's lost for those of us who don't read ...

The Master???? *screams* You can't do that you cant do that youcantdothat!!!!! Sorry, but.... you-cannot-have-a-character-called-"The Master". You can't. Nix. Zilch. Zip. Zed. Raxacoricofallapatorius.

Sorry Pol, I keep on reading this in the wrong order. :oops: The Shade sat down and was obviously breathing hard. Well, duh, if he's breathing hard, he's breathing hard. ...

Very nice. :D To be frank, I didn't think this was going to be very good, but it was - surprisingly so. Just this leapt out and bit my nose: ...

Glack, can't wait till next chapter! Ambers eyes were filled with concern. Ambers = Amber's She was dressed in pajama’s, like she had rushed out of the house. Pajama's = ...