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I'm enjoying this just as much as always. :) And Kiera was lying about her brother? Tut-tut. "Naughty, naughty. Little girls should play with nasty torture devices." Should = shouldn't? ...

Uh, it isn't. You're mising HEAPS of quote marks, and you have too many commas in too many places to count. And when you have a paragraph you need to ...

This was a good idea, having it in a chat room, but having allie68 getting all scared just because luv54 has left without saying goodbye is too over the top. ...

“Hello.” He said politely. Blimey, Pol, don't you listen??????? PLEASE LISTEN WHEN I TELL YOU THAT IT'S A COMMA AND SMALL LETTER OR THERE'S NO POINT IN ME CRITTING!!!

Good. Nice style, not too much or too little description, although a touch more dialogue might be nice, but not necessary. If you do this you will be very, very, ...

:lol: Very funny, and the rhyming was very good. I drool over good rhymes. :wink:

Very good! :D What I would have liked better is a more defined ending. It's too open; I want to know how Sam did in the last Trial, and about ...

Ennui dun the crit ande picked out the errors already. I found this a bit confusing to start off with, but the ending was good, and explains Alexa's feelings at ...

Interesting, I like Greek myths. :) When Zeus reached the Corinthian column podium (forged by the great Hephaestus), he cleared his throat and began the proclamation. The bit in brackets ...

The uber archaic style of this really put me off. It just made me think too much of Eragon, which tries to be archaic. It is noteth goodeth to writeeth ...

Ah, a nice Happily Ever After! :D I like the songs that Elvina sings, and Father Christmas still visiting. :) He was now at the age of 20 and was ...

*sigh* Romance. Nothing wrong with it in itself, but it does manage to drag its way into everything. :roll: Anyway, good, and with only a few errors. :D Have you ...

The second one sounds better and more intriguing. :) But your grammer and all needs attention. Ellima 1 Your paragraphs need work. You need to leave a line between them, ...

I haven't read the first part, but I'll try to find it, if the bug has belched it back out again. This was good, and apart from the few things ...

Chan, good, tho. :) Knall pet Skyzer on the head and looked back over. Pet = petted? Patted? Knall could feel his magical energy being restored quickly. Knall closed his ...