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Woh, this was really original. Personification of clothes hangers... :lol: Really neat! I didn't talk to my hangers, but I talked to my collection of stuffed animals. I didn't spot ...

Nice. :) Romantic fiction's not really my thing, but this was alright. The ending was a bit too rushed, just like, "Here's some Shakespeare for you" "Oh wow, thanks, now ...

Alainna picked out the biggies, and the thingie about Mrs Ochoa sudden breaking down. It did feel out of place and over the top as well. Jamie nodded at the ...

You could draw out the tension more when Jace leaves Kylyn. It's an action scene, so spin it out. That what someone once said to me: draw it out. Make ...

Very nice, and I like the ending. Nice and unusual. :) But you HAVE to space this out more. Put paragraphs in, and leave a line between each paragraph. This ...

Good! There weren't nothing to nitpick, except this: “Never mind that, run for cover, idiot!” Fungal and Imp dived behind a sagging couch and Leah rushed for the desk, just ...

*SQUAWK* :thud: Cliffhanger!??!?!?!! And in such a nonchalont way - “Hello Lyla. I’ve come to get my son.” I think the spelling of pajamas differs if you're American. Pyjamas in ...

I haven't read this chapter, my bad, as they say. :) All the tiny mistakes have already been pointed out, so I'll just say as how I liked! Especially the ...

LOL, Cat and Annie are so funny! "I have come to conquer the world!" :lol: :thud: And I *do* think it would be good for Valery and deLucio together. Not ...

Woah, Fin's a prince? A king? The ruler? Why doesn't he want to be whatever his title is, I wonder? This was well written, but what I noticed is that ...

*blinks* I'd thought he'd changed! I really did!! She stood, her shaking arms holding her up, her hair giving her a small piece of darkness that she could hold onto. ...

Ouchie! That's not very reverent, but... :roll: I thought this was good; it created the scene well. Too well, hence said "ouchie!" I liked the repetition and capitalization of "Bound" ...

This reeks of cliche, sokool. :lol: I'm reminded of "I Capture the Castle" where one sister says that she'd "marry a chimpanzee if he had money" and the other responds, ...

Great! :D Are your characters really "trapped" in your head like that? :wink: With mine, it's more like they're having a great party that I'm hosting for them, and they ...

Oh, yes! I LOVE that book, and the old film. The new one looks rubbish. Blackberry as a girl? And with Rik Mayall and Dawn French as voices? It would ...