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Hey Kitty! I have ma shredding hat on, so beware. Also, I just did a nice review, so you get a nit-picky one, I’m afraid. :mrgreen: Christmas in the streets ...

Hello! I really, really liked this! I love how it was clear practically from the very beginning that it was a cat's narration. I suppose the title helped with that, ...

Hello! Do you mind if I'm a little mean? K. This doesn't sound original at all. Run Wyatt through some Mary Sue tests. Link One and Link Two for Mary ...

Hello! I was a normal seventeen year old guy, ready to start collge . Then , I saved her life. Typo here. You don’t need that comma. I love everything ...

Hello! I see you've just joined, so welcome to YWS! “The forest is a dangerous place, you know . ” A mother said as she emerged from the dim light ...

Hello! I almost don’t want to review this because I really liked it—and, yes, I connected with it as well. Aiee. However, reading something and not picking something out of ...

Hello! :D [quoteMy white hair, flowing down in soft waves, quickly mimicked my dress.[/quote] Eh. Throwing out character description like this is clunky and inmyface. Very much inmyface. I don’t ...

Hi! This was quite well written. :) There were some instances where I think you could improve -- mostly by cutting words out. Like here: Gemma let the mug pause ...

Hello! First off, you need to rate this as a topic, not just as a note at the top. When you start a new topic, you’ll see underneath the title ...

Hello! K, I’m going to be kinda picky because this is very short and because that’s how I roll. Twit Flounder, soulless shredder, pleased to meet you. The soft click ...

Hi! I don't often review poetry--well, to be completely honest, I almost never review poetry--so bear with me here and I apologise if what I say isn't very helpful. Maybe ...

Hai! This is quite short, so I’ll go through and be picky about it, if that’s all right. :) Smack, smack, smack... My feet pounded softly against the floor as ...

Hai! I’m going to be harsh, because that’s how one improves, and the whole point of being on here is to get comments that will help you improve, ja? My ...

Hai! But the point is mute : no one wishes to be ugly or mean, plain or stupid. Moot? Is that the right word? Back to my birthday: Susie, my ...

Hai! :D It is past midnight in the city. Yet the everlasting silence does not end. Well, I’d have thought that it being past midnight, it would be quite reasonable ...