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Re: There’s a canker in my brain
Hi Guinea Pig Girl, Thank you for your poem, and May the Fourth be with you! There's some really good stuff here, but it feels incomplete. It might help if ...
May 6, 2016 -
Re: Chapter - 1 ( Teen Life)
Hi Akshata! Thank you for writing! Your story has a strong potential; a life-changing day at school is a good formula for many writings, from YA to anime/manga. However, I ...
May 6, 2016 -
Re: Long Lost
Hi Allison, and May the Fourth be with you! I have to say, I'm a little confused about what's going on here. You have a real strength for showing the ...
May 4, 2016 -
Re: How the Devil Fell for a Common-day Saint
Hi Kiwifruit, Thanks for writing this! Lol... "I lied." DAMN, that's brutal! You've got some great, eye-catching dialogue and wonderful one-liners. You've successfully piqued my curiosity, so please f
Apr 16, 2016 -
Re: Return to Oblivion Draft
Hi Dracowave! I really like when religion, philosophy, or mythology shows up in fiction, even (or especially) when it's not my own. So thanks for that! Overall, I think that ...
Mar 12, 2016 -
Re: bomb house
Thanks for the poem! It's a confusing and therefore unsettling piece. The writing style reminds me a bit of an e e cummings poem, specifically "i am a little church." ...
Feb 19, 2016
