Trident

I like it better. ^_^ There are a few things that could be trimmed. Redundant phrases and the like. But overall, it's a fascinating story.

Lol. Colleen, I simply love the way you get your point across. Your advice is invaluable. And thanks everyone else for the comments. They are extremely helpful.

I promise to take a look soon. Can't do it right now, though...

Thanks you all for the comments. Very helpful indeed.

Point well taken. I think I'll have to work on some better images here. Boring?... I'll work on that. :) Thanks.

Lol, I must have been reading Shel Silverstein to my sister that day.

This author was banned long ago. No need to drag this up. *LOCKED*

Very nice Snoink. And I'm glad you preserved the flea. Why should it die just cause it had mixed their DNA?

A particularly unimportant character tiptoed through Alcmene’s home. She had survived the birth of her son, and he was quite healthy, even after staying in the womb for so long. ...

*Locked*

Updated.

Lol, many thanks for the comments. I think I'm going to change the ending because the way I did it there was very abrupt as you said. The problem was ...

I like it much better. ^_^ You've got an intriguing way to describe it and it's different. I think it's improved greatly. Best of luck.

Number Three Okay, I agree that if you're going to have a link between these three, there should be something more apparent. If it is the same man (some of ...

Many thanks for the comments all. I'll see if I can't get another part up within the next week or so.