TriSARAHtops

Hello! I'm going to go straight into the review: I walked out of the house with two bagels in my hand, one for Cam and one for me, and walked ...

I was really interested by the idea behind this, and I am still interested by where it will go. I love the title, also. The story idea I reckon may ...

Firstly, a little bit of nitpicking: You wrote defiantly when I think you meant definitely in the first sentence of the biggest paragraph, but it's the only error I can ...

Perhaps I am not necessarily the best person to review poetry as I have somewhat no experience when it comes to both reading and writing, so this review will probably ...

I love it! Especially the fact that the NOOO.... goes all the way of the page. Whether that's intentional or not, it's a wonderful little addition to the story. Okay, ...

A good start to the story- it throws the reader right into the story. The action scene is well-written, but it lacks a certain not desperation, but feeling of danger. ...

Heya Chuck. Firstly, just watch out that you don't switch and change tenses. You started out in the present tense, then switched to the past, then back to the present, ...