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I read your first chapter a while ago, and I was glad to see you'd continued it. First impression is that you have a LOT of characters. And they've been ...

Hello! Here to catch up and rescue you from the green room! :-D I have to agree with timmyjake - this chapter was of a really impressive quality. I thoroughly ...

Hello again! Quick confession: I didn't actually find any quibbles that haven't been pointed out. Make sure you always have the comma (or full stop, or whatever's applicable) before the ...

For some reason I read this, then didn't write a review. I dunno. I'm here to write one now, and finally get this out of the Green Room. I kind ...

Hello hello! I've finally got enough time on my hands to pay this the attention it deserves, so I'm going to launch into my review. Firstly, quibbles. Nothing major, just ...

...and as promised, here's the review! Surprise! You've managed to pull off something really great here in the difference between Mercy and Layla's voices. It was clear from the start ...

Hiya! Here to review as requested. This was a definite improvement on the first chapter. Before I get into properly discussing this, I had some quibbles to point out: Where ...

Here as promised in my review of chapter one! I thought this chapter was very much improved on the previous, but I still had a couple of quibbles: n her ...

Hi there! I saw the second chapter to this in the Green Room and the title intrigued me, so I thought I'd check this out. I'll start with the quibbles: ...

Hello! I really can't be bothered coming up with some snappy introduction, and I've said 'here to review!' way too many times recently, so I'll just get into the review. ...

Me again! I think I'll just cut to the chase with this review without waffling on at the start. Not so many quibbles this time, but I did catch a ...

Can I just say again how gladI am to have adopted your novel. It seriously is so good that I'm struggling to comprehend how much you've improved from chapter one. ...

Hey there! Finally here to review as promised. Sorry it's taken so long! I really don't have much to say about this story. It was a pleasure to read, and ...

Hiya Artemis! Here to review your second chapter! As it's already been said below, this chapter was a massive improvement on the previous one. It just seemed a lot smoother ...

Me again! Before I actually review I just have to say that if I have the P!nk song stuck in my head, I'll know who to blame. :-) I'll get ...