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Hi! I suppose I might as well be the one to give a brief review, since I am a huge fan of Left 4 Dead - obviously obvious as it ...

Hi Bolshevik. It's an interesting idea to write a poem in a different language, and I agree that you need to show more technical elements. I can tell this was ...

Ah Vampy, your fine vocabulary, and language skills, have caused me to overlook any rhythmic inconsistencies in your work. This is indeed a very deep and thought-out piece, and deals ...

Certain aspects of this poem are good, but I'm a little confused by a few things. A lonely street full of people. The contrast to me has little immediate effect, ...

Hi sis! *snuggloffs* A very nice, simple, clean-cut poem. Rhythmically sound, except for stanza three, where I think the last line needs a few more syllables to keep the rhythm ...

Hi sis! Hope you'll forgive me, but I'm not one for quoting a whole piece and going through line by line analysis. This poem portrays a very simple lifestyle, or ...

I think I have it. It's a cocktail, called the Cimmerian Shade, made with Creme de Violette, sparkling red wine, rose essence, and grape syrup. Colourwise, it's a very, very ...

Hi Perse! A very dark poem, and very intricate with details, although I have a few minor issues with the structure. The length of the lines makes it harder to ...

Hi Catri. First, punctuation at the end of the first stanza - it's not enjambement - it's just a mistake having nothing. I like that this is a faceless poem, ...

Hi Stela! Thanks for the link. First off, wow, that's a graphic opening paragraph (I just thought you were just underplaying it! xD). I like the tone you have used ...

Hello Emmzziee (I assume you're name is Emily, no?). I'm here like you asked :) First off, a very nice poem to read. The general consistency of the rhyming scheme ...

Hello Kasidie. A very short and fairly effective poem. Perhaps you could expand this into something more bulky, and I'd really like to read it if longer. Since it is ...

Hi Clever! I read this twice, and came to the conclusion this poem is a short about heartbreak, not simply winter as the literal translation plays out. Am I right? ...

Hi Becki! First off, this is quite a relative story. One that is apparent and valid in everyday life, wherever you care to look. The step-by-step style isn't really my ...

Simple, repetitive rhythmic structure, and pretty effective. Although it's fairly short, I honestly don't mind too much, because it still has effect for what it's worth. Try using a colon ...