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what?

just cuz halo yall are now super duper marine fans. Golly, thats so silly. Army's way better and in this instance everyone except maybe the Navy would be defending earth. ...

nice editing. i know it was just kinda inspired but i think you should try and add more. It could turn out to be a pretty cool story.

cool , nice lil addition

thats was a pretty cool story but you shouldnt have split up the dialogue in the beginning.

that was purdy funny dude, i love that movie!!

i have to do a persuasive essay too, due tommorow, its not as good as yours, lol. oh well nice work Me

lol my grammar sux! anywayz, thanks guys ill edit this and then repost the next later.... oh and firestarter, he heard of the thugs from a friend, a trusted friend. ...

in my opinion that doesnt sound right becuase i tihnk the boy would probably have bolted, scared beyond his wits, and tried to look every which way to cover himself. ...

good. i would like to see more of the vikings with the cross.

I THOUGHT, oh sorry, I thought, it was a 'cute' lil story. it was nice and simple and kinda...silly? It wasnt 'overly' anything but it was entertaining.

Im a lil interested, i think it could use some light revision if you wanted. Nothing too extreme though. It could also use a twist so it doesnt become an ...

PUUURDY INTERESTIN... can i ask what your picture is of?

knarly man!

roflmfao...ast certain parts...cool story their Flames