ToritheMonster

I enjoyed this, and can't wait to read more. However, I'd like to know a bit more about your characters. Where do they live? What, if anything caused the MC ...

I liked this very much, but it had some issues. Firstly, you often forget a period: "Come..come" should be "Come... come." I also think it would be nicer if you ...

Well... I see what you were trying to accomplish in these. Truly funny limericks are incredibly hard to write, so props to you for trying. However, you humour came off ...

Hey! Okay, so I really liked this. Pudin and Lava caught all of my nitpicks, but I have a question. What happened to the girl in the store? Did she ...

Personally, I thought this was beautiful. It was a poem about death, but it wasn't ranting baout how much one misses the dead person, it was just.. telling. It was ...

Heya xxbwi! Alright, I didn't really like this. I'll tell you why. This started off as a poem with great potential, and turned into a rant, a sad path many ...

Heya, Skins! Alright, this is a huge improvement. You really took those reviews to heart, eh? I'll be back with a real, complete critique later, but it's currently one in ...

Hey, Hannah! Okay, I'll just say it: this is one of the best poems I've read. Not just on YWS. Anywhere. I'm not typically a gentle reviewer, so that's saying ...

Alrighty, you know the drill. Corrections in red, take-outs with an asterisk. I stared at my desk with my arms crossed. I swore I’d put my phone there last night. ...

Here I am as requested!Corrections/comments in red, an asterisk means I took something out. I was seven years old when I first met my older sister, my deceased older sister, ...

Hey! Wow, I actually kinda loved this... I’ve fallen too far deep, Where I can no longer find my way, Doing things I know I shouldn’t, Saying things I shouldn’t ...

Hiya! I'm Dreamy, and I'll be your reviewer today. Now, first things first. You seem pretty new, so you might not know this: one: we write out words. pl. should ...

Heya! Well, for starters, this was really good. I didn't see the rating, but I assume you rated it 18+, yes? I loved your characters. They were easily lovable or ...

Heya! Here I am, as requested.. but right off the bat, I hafta say, this is much too long. I can't really give you an all that detailed review, because ...

Oh my goodness! I love 'The Outsiders'! As for your poem itself, it was very good. However, they calls them "socs", not "socials", even thought that's what "socials" stands for. ...