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Re: The Scene
i liked this poem, but i got lost in the last stanza. i was confused about the flash was off in the distance, or what the discovery was... =)
Aug 1, 2010 - Re: Memories In June Aug 1, 2010
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Re: Part Two of demigod (not really its title)
yay! im really happy you like it! i was worried that it wasn't very good, and i'm still makeing a lot of adjustments to it. =]
Aug 1, 2010 -
Re: Modern Zombie
this is good, but i was confused about whether it was supposed to rhyme or not. the begginning didn't rhyme, but the end didn't, and neither did parts of the ...
Aug 1, 2010 -
Re: Symptoms - Prologue
this is good, except you changed tense once or twice. also, maybe you could discribe the scene the characters are in better, like showing how the room looks. other than ...
Jul 31, 2010 -
Re: Demigod
and i totally hate these first two chapters, so thank you very much for saying how i can make them better. =)
Jul 31, 2010 -
Re: Demigod
hey, yeah, i don't have a title for it yet, so that's just what i have it saved under on my computer. =)
Jul 31, 2010 -
Re: Screaming Silent Prayers
i liked the last sentace, maybe have a follow up poem about how your going to over throw the sorrow. =)
Jul 31, 2010 -
Re: Past, Present, Future
yeah srry that last kayay123 post was actually me... :D
Jan 30, 2010 -
Re: Dying Darkness (revised)
yeah i noticed that also... i knew it wasn't very good at the end, but i didn't rlly know how to end it.. now i have a better idea for ...
Jan 30, 2010 -
Re: Keeper: [2] *edited*
WONDERFUL! great way to keep me hooked my adding suspense at the end!!!! now i really cant wait to read the next ones
Jan 30, 2010 -
Re: Keeper: [1] *edited*
Great beginning, it hooked me immediatly but was a bit slow, much better as the story went further on however and i cant wait to read the rest
Jan 30, 2010