TigersMoon

Very good ending, with a few corrections. There are multiple places where your spacing is off. You should reread and look for those. In the meeting with Star you said ...

Hey, Wind! I'm here for a review. I couldn't find any grammatical errors. Kudos to you. Vivienne is an interesting character. By going through a lot of pain, she got ...

This blew me away. I don't even know where to start with my praise. Ellie is a defined character. She loves the house and the people who lived there. She ...

Hi Unknown391625! I just want to say that I haven't read the competition rules, as I couldn't find them, so some of theses nitpicks might be invalid. First, Mr. Lynch ...

First, the nitpicks, I'm just going to get this out of the way (I watched too much Cinema Sins), the mysterious boy plays the pronoun game. Con seems a bit, ...

This is a very good prologue. It has lots of action, which is a hook for readers. It also has a lot of questions, making the reader read on. I ...

This doesn't suck. It's good. The poem is written about you and all the things that you've done. Your life sounds interesting. Memorizing the Nutcracker at eight and escaping the ...

This is a nice poem. Soft and quiet. At least that's what I get from it. I picture someone walking near a river, wind blowing, the sun setting. This is ...

This is a very good prologue. It sets up the story and gives the reader background on the plot. The relation between man and dragon is clear and interesting. It ...

This is a very touching short. It lets you see how the main character feels about his wife. I also like how there's no dialogue. That was a good touch. ...

This poem is basically what I want. Snow. But as it says, there is no snow in July. I love how you talk about how your dreams trick you into ...

This is great. You can feel the main character's emotions. Being an outcast is something I know well, (Every day at out land lunch table) so I can relate to ...

This story had several good points. You had good character development. Terence was a very clear character. Jaune was also clear cut. She did change a bit, from friend to ...

I must write a review for this wonderful piece of writing! First off, the description is beautiful. You focus on one thing so perfectly when you write. However, there is ...