Threnody

First, I've got to say, this is a cute little poem and it was bubbly, and easy to read. I liked it, and the things I have to say are ...

It seems like your grammar is in check, so I'll just skip to the main overview~ This story was really deep and beautiful and flowing. You're details were very good, ...

Streaming bands of silver And bricks lined with gold. Planets dazzled by starlight, And night skies left to behold. • Nice beginning. It doesn't introduce the poem's point very well, ...

we see ourselves in shadows when we are in love forgetting the rustiness of our open flesh • Spelling. • An effort on spelling would be greatly appreciated. • Also, ...

For one, I've got to say, wonderful job. For a person who is learning English as a second language, I've got to say excellent job even being able to write ...

This poem is particularly stunning. You're vocabulary shines and overall this poem is pretty perfected. Looks like your grammar has been cleaned up mostly, so here's just a few comments. ...

Again, I checked over the others grammar checks and they've covered all you need to fix. Here's just some basic thoughts I've had~ Inconsistent. The plot seems a bit choppy. ...

Here you are, as asked for. It seems as if people have beat me to the grammar issues, so I'll just tell you my overall thoughts about this~ Plot: The ...

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Hey! Welcome to YWS! Here's the review, and I think you're beautiful by the way, in your avatar. I picked up a magazine one day About as happy as i ...

This baby I bestow upon thee, She will be your saving grace. From all the deity she is yours, Such a special gift is a rarity. • Okay. Good intro. ...

Hiding in the darkness From the evil one Here she comes around the corner I take off and run. • This entire stanza lacks iambic pentameter and a good syllable ...

Note to Self: Stop reaching for things impossible to grasp. Stop holding this stuff you’re unable to clasp. Stop climbing the ladder awaiting your fall. Stop looking for “Prince Charming”, ...

This poem was... spectacular. It's entire aura was that of something that could have very much came from the Shakespeare, the master himself. Old English does seem to be a ...

If I wanted to review this, should I review your original post or your second post? Um. I'll do second. -life is pain, pain is life. -but it can be ...