Thirst_23

Guys, this is just my prologue. Dracula is not my main character. Oh, well, I suppose I'll have to post in order from now on the keep you in the ...

Did you think I should have introdcued him by name sooner?

This is really awesome. I love the bantar, and the movement of the dialogue is perfect. I also like the Life bit. Umm...yeah, keep up the good work!

At last the twilight hours began. My skin was heavily sunburned, even though I’d kept to the shadows as much as possible. I set out, for anywhere but where I ...

The morning burned on. I sat curled up in a ball next to a dumpster, shivering. I was trapped between two worlds; the wild, crazy instinct that feared any movement ...

Ok I trust you, o wise storyteller!

Here's the FIRST section of Chapter 1, revised. Tell me if it's any better. The Night Chronicles; Thirst Book 1- The Hunter To everything there is a season A time ...

Write more? You're wish is my command.

We know it's an accident. That's why you post stuff here, so others will review, and help you spot these things. ;)

Ok, thanks. :)

Well...hmm... There's not really a reason why she attacked. She's very much a slave to instinct. The cologne is his blood, and try as she might, she can't resist it. ...

two weeks ago, I didn't know they existed. Now, BELLA AND EDWARD FOREVER! (pun intended.)

To tell the truth, I think that the first section is a little awkward. You might try seeing what the story feels like without it. Remember, your readers are smart, ...