TheThing

Very sweet poem that sounds very personal towards the end. However, as you said, it flits between that and a Hallmark card. And, like you said, there's no solid rhyme ...

Before I begin this, I'm relatively new at poetry too (my poems aren't too good, unless you want to read them, in which case, they're amazing and you should do ...

This is a great poem. The reader can truly see the dichotomy of this woman's home land of basics, to the new world's artificial life, and how the basics are ...

I agree with everything LastPaladin has said. It feels like an unfinished poem. You present the 2 sides of the road, but nothing else. That leads to a very confusing ...

This is a very good poem. The words come very naturally, and feel like the speaker is actually holding a conversation with me. Believe it or not, that can be ...

That was a great theme for a poem. It speaks to just about everyone - how we, as a society, hides our actual emotions in the course of public life. ...

I really like this poem, but I'm going to focus what I didn't like. I'm not a big James Dean fan (all I know is that he was in Rebel ...

I agree with Evi. While it is a nice poem with a lot of meaning to it, the haiku format hinders it. Like Evi said, it gets repetitive when done ...

I actually really liked this. I thought the comparison of a single wave from an ocean storm to a ballet dancer was wonderful and imaginative. The only thing I would ...

While this poem has some good bones, it lacks the muscle to really carry the poem. You picked a tough format to work in. These type of poems are usually ...

This is a fairly good poem. But I'm going to explain why it's not a great poem. The first thing I notice is the form/structure of the poem. The lines ...

This could be a good poem, but I'm not feeling the same emotion you're feeling. Your other poem,"Him", definitely does have that feeling of love in it, while this one ...

First, BlackWind, poetry doesn't always have to rhyme. It can be free verse, and I'll touch on that in this poem later. I'm not exactly sure how to feel about ...

That was very....interesting. To me, it sounds very autobiographical, although I can be wrong. But the stream of consciousness style and the names of the teachers seem like this could ...

This was a great story, although it just kind of flowed, rather than had a clear plot. The poetry was beautiful throughout the story, but I had a hard time ...