TheEstimableEelz

Wonderful poem. The tale relayed is classical and simple (seems to be the tale of Helios' son Phaëtōn), yet none the less well-told for it. Great line breaks, and the ...

Nice!- about as well as one can manage with those rigid forms teachers so like in high school English. Just a few grammatical 'corrections', since your teacher will probably nitpick ...

I like this - there is not nearly enough (good) nonsensical writing on this site. That said, some opinionated advice: - If you're going to write a nonsense poem, it ...

Awesome poem! I disagree with the previous posters, I think you should leave in 'petite' -- the poem flows better with a 2-syllable word in there, and 'petite' is underused, ...

Your pacing is good and consistent - the reader doesn't have to pause awkwardly anywhere. The rhyme scheme is simple, but it works well. =] However... not to be mean, ...

I like the language you're using here, but I feel like the poem thinks of itself as cleverer than it really is. You have elements that I have seen and ...

Generic subject+approach, I'm afraid. However, the diction is good. A few grammatical errors here and there, but I think you could actually add more to represent the speaker being really ...

Seems interesting... my guess for the title question is unwanted pregnancy for the 'you'. First, small grammatical corrections. You, everywhere; there were only a few places you weren’t. And you ...

Nicely done! Certainly much better than what I expected from the title, and not nearly as cliche. - The main thing is that you overuse question marks. I understand why ...

Nice poem. Kind of cliche, but that's fine from time to time as long as you try to have a fresh perspective. Your site mentions that you played piano for ...

Great poem. Wonderful build-up - at first it seems like two people together, talking back and forth, in a way that would commonly imply an impending break-up. Instead, the last ...

Neat little poem. Hoping to find adventure - - Maybe use a comma instead of the dash, but definitely some sort of short pause is needed. Until I gave up ...

Oddly enough, I wrote a poem with the same title a year or two back (since changed simply to Strings , heh). Though, yours is nicer. I love the "sinister ...

Interesting poem. First, just a minor grammatical correction: from the insomniac ' s dream. I like how the third stanza suddenly has consistently longer lines than the rest of the ...

I love the poem's tone - it feels detached from but at the same time intricately connected to its subject, as though the connection allows for more objectivity rather than ...