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Re: The Remaining Survivors: Chapter One
Hello, love! Aurora here with a quick review for you :). Nitpicks first. I was in a dark gloomy forest for a reason I couldn’t remember. I was in a ...
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Re: Toad Tales
Hello, love! Aurora here for a quick review! Nitpicks first :). "Excuse me," it said politely, "But I would be much obliged if you could set me off on that ...
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Re: Take Me Instead - Chapter 3
Hello, love! Aurora here with a quick review for you! I haven't read the previous chapter, so you'll excuse me if I mess something up due to that ;). Nitpicks ...
Jul 2, 2014 -
Re: Down to Earth Chapter 1-Might Change Title Later
Hello, love! Aurora here with a quick review for you! Alright. I think you should italicize the article (which, by the way, was excellently written) so that the reader can ...
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Re: Corvus Ultimate: Chapter 3
Hello, love, Aurora here for another quick review! Jake felt something he'd never experienced before; the feeling that he was being watched. What, his mother's never snuck up on him ...
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Re: Corvus Ultimate: Chapter 2
Hello, love! Aurora here for a quick review! I want to know what happens to Jake!!! At first, I didn't associate his pain with his accident, but then I realized ...
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Re: Corvus Ultimate: Prologue and Chapter 1
Hello, love! Aurora here with a quick review for you :). This is you being rusty ? I only have like.... one critique for you! If you get better, there ...
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Re: The foolish child filled with doubt.
Hello, love! Aurora here with a quick review for you! An attempt at breaking out, Was what got her life snuffed out, Until now, you've written in the present tense ...
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Re: Denied: Chapter 1- Part 1
Hello, love. Aurora here for a quick review. I had just witnessed a tragedy, in front of my car was a mass of crushed metal and screaming voices. I had ...
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Re: The Player Piano
Hello, love! Aurora here with a quick review for you! Down to business. I danced and hummed and constantly listened I would take the constantly out. It has so many ...
Jul 2, 2014 -
Re: Resurrection Ch.2
Hello, love! Aurora here with a quick review for you. Wow. This was good. I didn't find any grammatical issues here. Besides, your style and pacing are perfect. Although... I ...
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Re: Silence
Hello, love! Aurora here with a quick review for you! Nitpicks first: "I'm through with this silence. Talk to me!" She begged Period after begged, love :) I answered "Why ...
Jul 2, 2014 -
Re: The Book Man, Chapter 60 (Revised)
Hello, love! Aurora here with a quick review for you :) Nitpicks first :) It was the first hot meal Christian had eaten since leaving the Book House, and he ...
Jul 1, 2014 -
Re: Chapter 9 Final Destination
Hello, love! Aurora here for a quick review! Nitpicks first. :) The man has a sturdy ascent, broken almost. I think you meant accent. A strong slang to Wyatt that ...
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Re: Insane Mary
Hello, love. Aurora here for a quick review! Okay. Let me just point out something. People don't go crazy because of abuse. At least... not the abuse she's been through. ...
Jul 1, 2014