TheBob

I'd suggest you improve your "helping" skills. Because it took me about an hour to figure out what your were saying i did wrong look at the first review above ...

All you did was copy down my ENTIRE story onto your "review" and said fix it. I only see maybe two sentences worth of your writing this dosent help most ...

Thanks for the input yeah i do really have a run on sentence problem. Thanks and happy Halloween to you to!

Not to make you feel stupid but did you even read the description? I stated specifically that i knew there were lots of grammar mistakes. This was more of a ...

Close its supposed to be exactly that except for greind is friend.

Ipsa suscipiat , amice, tui magis miris fabulis sperabunt. That's Latin try and figure it out!

Sorry again for the none grammar fixing issue. my next Chapter will be improved grammatically. Hope All who read this enjoy.

This is very good poem that i think a lot of people could relate to. It is a bit depressing, but i guess that is the point. Anyone reading this ...

I truly do appreciate the constructive criticism to often i have people who are willing to criticize but not help improve the story. Again thanks for the input.

Thanks for the helpful input I've just barely started writing and by no means am an expert.