Tenyo

Hi BlackhawkUnder! This is so cool! It's rare that I get this excited about a novel opening. What I really like is that you seem to have a pretty good ...

Hi! Aw man, this changes everything. Well, not everything, but a whole lot. Bartimaeus' indignant attitude is quite amusing. I can see the resentfulness of his servitude. Raptor, on the ...

Hi! Again, great character dynamics in this, I can't fault them much. There's something odd about reading about someone who feels like one thing but is trying to act like ...

Hi! Hehe, this chapter is really fun! There's something quite delightful about your characters. They all seem to have very unique traits that set them quite far apart from each ...

Hi! I like the wealth of information May has on the world around her. It's a really interesting perspective to know so much about the mechanics of how a strange ...

Hi Mage! For the most part this feels like a transitional chapter, one that neatly ties the seams in between where the character is and where they're heading, and for ...

Hi! Haha, this is fantastic. My inner nerd is adoring this so much. I really, really like the process in which she realises this is minecraft. The mass of references ...

Hi! Your chapters are quite a nice length. They're not too long, and consistent enough to easily lead from one to another. This one is a bit blocky, probably because ...

Hi Mage! "She was suddenly aware of how messy her room was." - I love this character, something about summoning spirits without first tidying your bedroom is brilliant. Also, I ...

Hi! "Minecraftia" made me giggle XD I wasn't expecting the change of viewpoint here, and it works really well. Personally, I much prefer novels that switch viewpoints, especially when the ...

Hi Mage! As a general impression, I get the feeling your writing style is quite unrefined, and that's okay. In fact, it's pretty good. Some of your grammar is loose ...

Hi KyrianKane! This is interesting! I like where you're going with it, but it feels a little raw. The points made in it are really strong, and you cover a ...

Hi DarkPrizm! This poem is tiny! It reminds me of the phrase 'big things come in small packages', maybe because of the mention of 'littlest things' and 'package.' It definitely ...

Hi RippleGylf! I really like the theme of stillness and silence in this poem. It's a very hard thing to do. Personally I find a lot of poetry aims to ...

Hi CharlotteS! A belated Welcome To YWS! to you. This is really sweet. I agree with Ghosts, it's a very relatable poem, especially during adolescence with the confusion of trying ...