Tenyo

I love the title, I can't remember what the exact word for it is, but the contrast between tears and fire makes it interesting. The beginning hooked me right away, ...

You gots mno reviews :( Talk about epic proportions, one person dies and the world ends? The end of the world is a little cliche, but the idea of the ...

This is amazing. Historical fiction can be a bore to people outside the genre, but this kept me reading all the way through. It seems most of the little things ...

Aww, so sweet. The 'Woah' thing is a little annoying, especially since it seems to be used as a form of expression, it just seems like these lyrics are brilliant ...

Wow... It seems like there's something quite fragile behind this. I'm not sure what the numerals are for, but they're odd and out of place. The structure seems a little ...

Hey there. I'll get the icky stuff over with first. The rhythm of this in several parts was out, and some of the phrases are awkwardly worded, or improperly punctuated. ...

Amazing introduction! I loved it. The second paragraph was not so amazing. It was a little confusing, and didn't seem to fit much. I'd suggest just cutting that bit. There's ...

This is interesting. I love the contemporary outlook that a lot of todays younger writers surprisingly lack. There's a few nits to be picked though. Word-tag-syndrome; words like 'said' and ...

Haha, very cute. I can imagine a small child tying themselves in knots whilst thinking about this. 'Nowa' days' - I like the little hint of slang, I'm not sure ...

My first tip would be that there's too much, too fast. Once I read most of it I worked out what was going on, but the beginning was too puzzling. ...

Interesting piece. I really like the way you blended the euphoric feeling straight into panic quite seamlessly. The idea of waking up happy, and then starting to worry about where ...

Generally the theme of death is depressing, and these kinds of poems drag, but this is pleasantly thoughtful. I like the ideas you've put forward. I have to agree with ...

The "O" Thing isn't really working for me. Maybe it's the technique, maybe it's just the big hole-shape on the page, but it just doesn't look pretty. The verse is ...

Okay, icky stuff first. This needs work, a lot of it. Title: The rule of three is awesome, except when it fails, in which case it is a complete disaster. ...

Okay, icky stuff first. "People, laugh" - comma is in the wrong place. "You're heart is crushed" - 'You're' means 'You are.' 'Your' is the word for belonging. I'm not ...