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Hey Raven! First things first, what's [0.02] ? Is this the second part of an unedited novel, or is it chapter two? I assume the former. It doesn't really seem ...

Hey Ziggie :D Okay, as a newly budding grammar freak, this piece made me cringe. I do like it, but an incomplete sentence is something that, even though people get ...

Hey Jorge. Browsing through your portfolio I think you may want to start taking your writing more seriously, or invest in a blog. A blog is a great place to ...

Hey Angel. My first suggestion would be to unbold the bold parts. When your reader first looks at the poem, they're the first three words they see. Since there's nothing ...

Hey Ease. I like the second best. Th first gets straight to the point, and the second does drag a little. On the other hand the first is quite bland ...

Hey Lezalean :D I love this! The idea and the story anyway, it's brilliant. But is it supposed to be a short story? I think you could do some amazing ...

Hey Kitro :) Okay, in all honesty I don't know what to make of this poem. It seems half brilliant and half cliched. I loved the lines "Sure I'll laugh ...

Hey TJ Oo, that's heavy, but brilliant. I can bet that 99% of writers on this site will completely agree with you, as do I. So, to critique! The way ...

Hey Devin :D I must say this poem seems wonderfully intricate. You must always remember though that though some people like intricacy, others prefer simplicity, and so there are two ...

This is brilliantly written, and the language used really gives it a nice edge. The imagery is really good and gives a good picture of what's going on. I also ...

Hey Sare I like this poem :) It was very sweet, and it gave a really good insight to the relationship between you and Lou. The only thing is that ...

Hey Iwrite First of all, you're brave to add 'pointless' as a choice on your poll XD I would say this piece of work falls into none of those catagories. ...

Hey Kaywiia *Triple checks spelling* I love this piece! It's so sweet. It reminds me a little of the poem 'Blackberry Picking' by Seamus Heaney- not sure if you've heard ...

Hey Skutter I really like what you're doing here with the script, and there's nothing really to comment on about the writing, but the presentation itself has a few things ...

Hey Sas Overally this is remarkably well written, especially for someone of your age. I really enjoyed reading it. The pacing is good, the plot develops very well. The characters ...