Tenyo

Review Part(7) Peuuuuwwwschooookchapoo!

Are you getting bored of my reviews yet? I'm loving this story, so I'll keep reviewing anyway :D The second part of this was really well written. It still seems ...

Review Part (5.2) "My hands wipe my pants." I think I may have mentioned this point before, but if not, this should be "I wipe my pants" or "I wipe ...

Review (5) Yey, twist! I found this chapter didn't really have much of a setting to it, you mostly described the characters. For that reason it was kind of hard ...

Review Part(4) I'm impressed :) You're really only fifteen. Again, the overload of unneccesary speech which makes it almost scriptlike. I'm warming up to the style though. Suddenly the phrase ...

Awesome! Compared to chapter two this is brilliant. There's still quite a lot of speech overall, but with the extra descriptions here and there it all flows quite smoothly. This ...

Review Part(2) Wait... What? In the last chapter you got to the point of Colin. This girl was talking about Colin who had moved away, appeared to be getting stressed ...

Hey Nike! I'm here to review your novel :) There's something quite refreshing about your style of writing. It's different to most drone-like styles. The only problem is that it's ...

Hey Wing. I like the piece in general, the general emotion and language used is really good. There's just a few things that drag it down. First; Silky Locks, raven ...

Hey Kingolions :) This poem is sweet. It's calming, and the imagery you've used is beautiful. At first I thought it looked a bit too short, but after reading it ...

Dante... *Shivers.* I'm slightly scared of writing anything negetive in this review XD This whole poem is very dark, and yes, very twisted. For some reason that I can't really ...

Awesome! Hey Aliza :D It needs work. The scenes are a little too jumpy, and there's a lot of speech in here. On the other hand, I'm getting a pretty ...

Review [0.05] This, I certainly like. Isabelle seems to really come to life here, and again I'm interested in this girl, how she became like this, and how she'll work ...

Review [0.04] As I mentioned in 03, I realise you may be posting these as you write them, but really, slot them together and organise them a bit more. Even ...

Review [0.03] Seriously, putting these all into one chapter would be easier to review. I'm kind of starting to get into the story now. Stories about Emo's are difficult and ...