Teardrop

Hey, Teardrop here! My nitpicks, and details are in the spoiler. Mistakes are highlighted in red! Comments are in bold! Three A Small Blue Book Heavy breathing and a crash ...

Hey, I'm Teardrop and I'll be reviewing this today. First of all, I thought this was interesting, and a good start to a novel. As the air of the afternoon ...

Hey, Teardrop here! Okay, this really lacks emotion. Also, you need punctuation in it when people speak. Here's the nitpicks, added stuff and corrections in red . Hey guys. this ...

Hey, Teardrop here! First of all, this coud have used punctuation and capitilization. Also, it could have been divided into stanzas, with ellaboration. as heartful as the tin man Would ...

Hey, Teardrop here! First of all, nice poem and I'm so sorry for your loss! :( I think you might want to add punctuation to your poem. . It's short, ...

Hey! Teardrop here to review, as requested. First of all, I really enjoyed this. I thought you could have described the character's purpose for being there more. Also, try and ...

Hi! Teardrop here! First of all, I thought this was interesting, and has potential, but needs a lot of detail and editing. : ) I sat on a park bench ...

Hey! Teardrop here. First of all, I liked this, but I thought it could use a little work. I am the forest and you are the trees. Now you are ...

Hi. I just wanted to say this is really amazing. The message was powerful, and the emotions grabbed me. I almost started crying when I read this, I can really ...

Hi! Teardrop here! First of all, wow. This was really original and beautiful. I couldn't find anything, but I thought that you could have explained the reason they're fighting or ...

Hi! Teardrop here! First of all, I really really liked this. I thought it was adorable and sweet. I have to say, I'm jealous. I wish I could write long ...

Hi! Teardrop here! Overall, I think this is really nicely done. The beginning drew me in and made me wanna keep reading. I couldn't find any more nitpicks or mistakes. ...

Hi! Teardrop here! Anyway, I thought this was really sweet. I liked the whole theme of it. I agree, this does belong on an Above The Influence commercial. XD ( ...

Hi! Teardrop here! ( Decided to review all the entries, so here it goes. ) Also, it wasn't late. XD Thank you so much for entering, I enjoyed this a ...

Hi! Teardrop here to review this today! First of all, I suggest spacing this out a lot. The first part is one huge paragraph, and all the dialogue is mashed ...