Niki's everything I wish I could be
Strong and brave and beautiful
Niki's never tired and she's never weak
She'll never give up fighting
Even though she can no longer breathe
Niki's my teacher and my heart
All wrapped in one
Niki's funny and nice and smart
She's the girl who had never broken my heart
The only one that cared
When things were falling apart
I guess what I'm saying
Is that Niki still has my heart.
To my ex girlfriend of three years; R.I.P Niki, I love you <3
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Oh, I loved it! Its beautiful, and poetic. Only few nitpicks.
Keep Writing!
This was a beautiful poem, and I'm very sorry about what happened.
The way you word it trully shows the way you're feeling and I can give no tips on editing that wouldn't be redundant. I love this poem a lot.
That was a very touching poem, I liked it very much. I'm very sorry for your loss..
Keep on writing!
-Truth-
Hey, Teardrop here! First of all, nice poem and I'm so sorry for your loss!
I thought this line could have been different, or said in a different way. I'm not exactly sure, but it stood out. Maybe add some more emotion.I think you might want to add punctuation to your poem. . It's short, and adding more emotion could make it longer so it could be divided into stanzas, but that's just what I think about it. I like the last line, by the way.
But overall, nice job. ^__^
~Teardrop