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Ooer. Look at me, being all punctual and all. E-mail is on its way! Like, as in, as soon as I hit "submit" and log into my e-mail and actually ...

*eats* ^^ Here's something you might want to check, right off the bat: Is weatherman one word or two? gifted as you are loose their life through such a tragedy. ...

Er... is there more to this? There isn't really enough to critique based off just this short blurb. =/ Honestly, there's no story here. We need a tangible story, a ...

*waves* Hello! Welcome to YWS. My name is Saint and I shall be your critiquer today. :D Memories began to swirl in his head triggered by the sounds of boats ...

Lin >> is not nearly as active as YWS, but it is the sister site for the 18+ members here. Also, a clarification: This work is rated R. This means ...

Hello there! Welcome to YWS! My name is Saint and I shall be your friendly neighbourhood Junior Moderator today! :D Quick note -- before I can critique this, I need ...

*yawns* Yeah yeah, whatever. Crawl on my stinky feet all you like. =P Agatha kicked her legs, As opposed to kicking with her fingers? ;) The high heal struck him ...

*moves to Fantasy Fiction* Okay, so you haven't been waiting as long for this one. Aren't I awesome? ;) (a super-fast version of running that both vampires and lycans are ...

*moves to Fantasy Fiction* Ahem. Moving on. Again, apologies for taking so long. :D Question: Your introduction doesn't seem to connect with this. Does it at any point? Not knowing ...

Yay action! Much better. :D Sorry I've been so slow about this, I've been rather busy lately. Please forgive me. ^_^ ‘Shut up you guys!’ Thoughts don't need quote marks. ...

Aye, I agree with those who have responded before me. This story is far too much dialogue and not enough narration. Where's the setting? Where's the sensory description? Come to ...

Hey Wolf! Sorry this has taken so long, I've been a bit busy. ^_^ Dusky pines formed a ragged circle around her, like teeth tearing into the star-strewn blanket of ...

'Bout time you posted something. “Hear, let me fix that for you,” Here* Nole never could have imagined any sort of health advocate being so obese! I've never liked exclamation ...

Hey Kylan! You requested a crit, and I'll warn you now that poetry critiques are not my forte, but I am trying to learn! So pardon any unhelpful or inane ...

*giggles* Your avatar is far more amusing than it should be. Not a single sheep could help me return to sleep. The rhyming there bugs me a bit. I'd find ...