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Re: This life - Chapter 1
A review, as requested! First, nitpicks/grammar. Red is something I changed. :) Curses and prayers, Nobody has the strength to dare. I don’t know how many battles have happened on ...
Mar 17, 2011 -
Re: Me or him.
Oh, gosh. I know you asked me to review this, and I said I wanted to be helpful with my reviews...but this is amazingly well written, for the length of ...
Mar 16, 2011 -
Re: My Great In Day Detail
A review as you requested! :D I like this. Its light and funny, and one of those things that even if you loved sparkly-Edward you aren't offended by the mocking ...
Mar 12, 2011 -
Re: Books you loved more than the movie...
Sorry if I repeat, I'll admit I haven't read most of the posts yet. ;) I could go on and on and on, as almost every time the book is ...
Mar 12, 2011 -
Re: Deep Magic Chapter 1: Part 1
She looked behind her should er and groaned. I'd go with "over her shoulder". It just flows better. Sitting on another desk, legs crossed, was Iyten, a man most women ...
Mar 12, 2011 -
Re: Truth or Fear?
Hm, I like this! Since its short, I'm going to try to be super thorough and helpful (and hack it up, as you ordered haha). Hopefully, it works! :D Do ...
Mar 11, 2011 -
Re: Realms & Adventures of the Ancient's Court
Hi! :) I'll try and be thorough here, hopefully its actually helpful. ;) Red is just changes I'd recommend, then I'll put comments and other suggestions. First, I want to ...
Mar 5, 2011 -
Re: Patience chapter 1
A review, as requested. :) Its already been pretty thoroughly reviewed, so I'm just going to do the generals. First, be VERY careful of run-on sentences. You have a lot ...
Mar 5, 2011 -
Re: (Unfinished)
Since this is short, I'll try and be really thorough. :) Red = minor spelling/grammar correction. If that's not what you wanted, sorry! Wind raised the long curls off the ...
Mar 1, 2011 -
Re: Homecoming
Hello there! :) My review, and I read without once think about stereotypes or anything. Personally, I don't care as long as something is well done and catches my attention. ...
Feb 28, 2011 -
Re: A Son's Crusade (Part 1, Chapter 1)
Okay, I am here for a review! I'll try and be as helpful as possible. Hope it works. ;) First, I think you should break paragraphs more. These tend to ...
Feb 28, 2011 -
Re: Chase
This is extremely interesting, such a different piece and a neat look into predator vs prey. I enjoyed it, though I will say I have a few nitpicks and comments. ...
Feb 28, 2011 -
Re: Hot Rod
I have nothing to say that could be of help to you, as I really loved it. It was just the right amount of everything, and I really like that ...
Feb 27, 2011 -
Re: Freedom Awaits: Chapter 1
Welcome! I'm rather new as well, and have the same problems of sitting down and actually writing a whole novel. Mine usually ends up in pieces on the computer, never ...
Feb 27, 2011 -
Re: FIngers Crossed (1)
This is only my second review, so hopefully its actually helpful! I think this has great potential, the idea of her being able to see demons and whatnot. I think ...
Feb 26, 2011
