TaylaChase

Hi, This was very good. You keep the reader interested and describe the character well. You make it easy to feel somewhat what the character is feeling. ...and he mind ...

Hi, I really liked this piece! I'm writing a story about wolves, too, cause I really like them. Anyway, on to the review; ...the only thing he saw before the ...

Hi Dakota, I really like this piece of writing. It's intriguing and keeps the writer interested. me and rule alongside me my wonderful kingdom You may want to change this ...

Hi This was good, but I did find some things that need to be changed. made a mental note of what to do if ever confronted with a similar gesture ...

Hi This was very good and intriguing. I did find a few nitpicks for you though. The wind howled loudly through the somber trees. Through the midnight fog Using 'through' ...

Hi, I don't really have the time right now to review such a long piece as yours, but I would suggest breaking this up into parts and you might get ...

Hi, This was really good! I liked a lot and was intrigued. I'm not a very good reviewer, but I'll do my best. Her breath was ragged, her paws were ...

Hi, This was really good and flowed along smoothly. who roams the blue-black floors Personally (and this is just my opinion here) I would just put one color or the ...

Hi, This was really good! “Pain without love.” Three Days Grace This part confused me. wiped off the dirt from the road This part makes it sound like she wiped ...

Hi This was really good! I couldn't find much wrong with it except you don't really put enough character detail or depth. Also it doesn't have much actually happening. Many ...

Hi This was really good! I like the way you wrote it. He leant casually against Hattie’s locker, his attention fixed only on me. I think you meant 'he leaned ...

Hi, This was really good! I enjoyed it. I did find some things you could change, though. he asked, and I nodded, grateful not to be walking alone. I would ...

Hi This was really good and I liked it a lot! I did find a few things, though. I liked your idea so far and it really captivated the reader. ...

Hi This is kind of short for me to be able to do a nice long review, but I'll do my best. :D I just did not know. I would ...

Hi I liked your story, It was very captivating! 'as they stared out our passing car.' 'out at our' 'he leant back' leaned 'as he leant over me' Again, 'leaned'. ...