TakeThatYouFiend

The sorting hat has the best personality in the whole series :-) First a criticism I repeat so often: You need to liberally sprinkle this piece with commas. There are ...

"You and I are birds of a feather Two peas in a pod are we" These two lines are fine, but perhaps a comma after feather and a full stop ...

Frickin' amazing. This simply is inspired. I didn't even understand it the first and second time through, and I read it twice more after that once it had twiged. The ...

Indeed. I find it useful to make sure everything I say, apart from spg, apart from in poems and dialogue, is in fact an opinion. I see people getting defensive ...

You shouldn't have said that. :-) You say not too fantasy, so I imagine that you are kinda tired of the Tolkien style of fantasy, worn out rather by D ...

Ok, normally I don't particularly like real depressing poems so I'm glad you put that little note at the end. Practically everything; the meter, rhythm, tempo, rhyme and structure; are ...

Greetings there! First a tiny typo: "far beyond me years," methinks you meant "my". Anyways, this was pretty good, you have certainly got a good subject matter here. It seems ...

Ok, yellow there! First off, I really liked the way you called her "she." I don't know whether you actually meant this to be a literary reference to the novel ...

Greetings! This is very nice, and I think it is almost rap like, which is pretty darn good (rap is generally harder to write as it often demands more rhymes). ...

This was, to say the least strange! I applaud you sir! I can honestly say I have never seen anything like that punctuation art. You certainly didn't fall into the ...

I realize this is a little old but I hope you don't mind a review. The rhythm of this piece is very nice, with the 5-4-5 line structure the symmetry ...

Right, this is great, I am a big fan of Shakespeare, the style is fine, and I like the form of the sonnet. But you really need to get some ...

Pretty darn good! There are a couple of points I would like to make if I may. Firstly you have a lovely metaphor with "twisted souls," but it doesn't seem ...

This certainly is a very good poem, and the structure and rhythm are faultless to my eyes, so I won't mention them. One thing I like is the fact you ...

This was rather nice, but although it was certainly not lacking in depth it would have been nicer a little longer. Despite this I particularly like the very last line, ...