TakeThatYouFiend

I must say that was one classy ending! The form of this is highly reminiscent of a children's tv show (and I don't mean rubbish like in the night garden, ...

Pretty much all of this depends on the assumption that the Bible is right. I believe in a loving God, not because the Bible says, but because it is the ...

Now that is a classy ending! Anyway, the registration number: you have written TIN MEN, "T1N M3N", but TIN MAN methinks would be better, "T1N M4N". Also methinks I would ...

This really is a lovely piece of work, and I'm afraid my review won't be up to much. The only criticism I can give you is about the description of ...

Well done! This was really well, done, and there was no way I would have expected that ending! Firstly this may sound strange (and you may totally hate the idea) ...

First off there are a couple of minor errors that you would do well to address. In the third paragraph there should be a comma after bed. In the fifth ...

Huzzah dragons! This sounds very much like a blurb to me, and methinks it is a key stage in the plot. It seems very manga-like, and also sort of steampunk. ...

Now this is what I call quirky! Firstly, on a quick grammatical note, you have written "Im" without an apostrophe. This is the only spelling error I could find. On ...

Hallo there! And may I say I am a fan of your work already :-) Anyway the only real flaw I encountered was that you start by talking as if ...

I have a feeling that this would make quite a good short film if it was directed right... There are two major issues I spot here however. Firstly, you have ...

*claps* This is a truly magnificent poem. A poet alway trys to compare sensations and this subject matter allows you to do it perfectly. Also I don't think there is ...

*claps* who could resist a piece with such a title! This piece certainly lived up to my expectations! It needs stanzification though. I don't know if this is you or ...

You say that smoking is the inhalation etc.... using a cigarette. This is not necessarily the case, for you forget the pipe. This is an issue that interests me, and ...

Hi there! This is great, and I see few nit picks. However I shall pick them out. It needs a little stanzification. Possibly a break after "blood painted nails", and ...

Hello there! I like the way you have ended both of your stanzas in the same phrase however methinks the last line Iis a little wrong, try moving "at me" ...