TNCowgirl

Oh, wow. Um, ya. Good, there wasn't really anythign I saw that needed to be fixed. But it was interesting. I thought maybe have him trash the place or something. ...

That was good. Just put a comma in front of the fan boys For (I think it's for) And Nor But Or Yet So MOST of the time you put ...

So, I've been keeping up with these stories and you need to continue. But I think they are going pretty good. Only a few glitches here and there. Personally I'm ...

*This story is inspired by a friend. I want to make it PERFECT before showing it to him. So I need heaps of advice! Also if you have any ideas ...

Remind me to read over this again. It is WAY to long for my brain to process. Stupid meds. :P. But seriously, looks pretty good by a scan. Nudge me ...

Could, not coulud. :P It was good. Good detail. Could've added a little more. But it was good. Keep going and tell me when you do if you are adding ...

Other then what everyone else already pointed out. You also need to capatilize letters after a period. And when in dialoge after someone finishes a sentence put a period, not ...

I'm offically hooked, and I didn't read the other parts, I'll go do that. This was amazing though. I didn't catch anything that other didn't already mention. That was crazy ...

(1) The wind pulled my hair across my face covering my eyes and the tears that rolled down my cheeks. (This doesn't make any sense to me.) (2) To me ...

Um, so I don't know if that was supposed to make sense. But it really didn't in my mind. It's kinda short too. You can't have something that short. I ...

Wow, that was really cool. There are a few mistakes. When you end a sentence someone is talking you tend to do so: "Hi, my name is Lisa," she smiled. ...

Here I am, gnawing on some Possum-y thing, when the sudden, human thought popped into my head. It took me reading that line a few times to relieze what it ...

Long time ago, somewhere 15-14 centure B.C. there was strong and famous country-Kolkha in the east of europe. The king of Kolkha was Aiethi. He had two daughters and one ...

finding Draive, herself was letting her braids out and letting her hair fall back into place. Ok, not Draive, herself But maybe Draive was letting her braids out, and letting ...

She was jerked awake the next morning by her friend. She had shock her. It's shook, not shock. And make it flow, like: She was shaken away the next morning ...