Long time ago, somewhere 15-14 centure B.C. there was strong and famous country-Kolkha in the east of europe. The king of Kolkha was Aiethi. He had two daughters and one san. One of the princess was Medea. Kolkha was very rich land, there were “rivers of gold” as greek historian says. But one day Kolkha`s richness was stolen by strangers.
I think, Everyone heared greek legend about “Golden Fleece”, which was stolen from Kolkha by greek Jason and Argonavts. But they can`t steal anything, without Princess Medea`s aid. She helped Jason to steal “Golden Fleece”. Then both run away together. But the end was not happy. Ten years passed. Jason and Medea had 2 children. But Jason decided to get married again. Medea killed Jason`s bride, which was from Korinto. Bride`s relatives were so angry, that they killed Medea`s children. This is a very sad story of love about first Georgian women. I always ask myself, if I were Medea, what should I do? And don`t know answer yet.
Somethimes Love make us happy, somethimes it bring sadness and trouble. But whatever happens, Love always be dearest feel.
Tell me please, if you were Medea, what should you do? What`s better, be a traitor of home country or traitor of love?
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: So this sounded like a cool continuation and sort of other point of view story on that Greek myth about Jason. And I think that's a really cool concept to be trying out. I would definitely read on if you've posted more about this story. You've definitely established a nice baseline on these two here with the thoughts that you've pointed out regarding Medea.
Anyway let's get right to it,
That should be century, Europe, son and Greek. Otherwise this actually seems the like the start to maybe a folk tale or a myth or legend of some kind and that's nice. it seems to do a good job if it was intended to be in that category.
Well that is certainly an interesting question to ask that I think not many people that reads these Greek myths consider with most of the heroes sometimes being flat out jerks to those that help them. This definitely sounds like it can be quite a fun little story if you decide to take it in this direction.
So that ending is quite interesting. Its almost phrased like this is some kind of prompt rather than an actual story because it seems to be calling for the reader to tell us what's going on or it could just be a pretty interesting prologue to have your own sort of retelling of a Greek myth. It certainly was a pretty interesting read.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall this was a pretty cool little story idea that you've got here and besides a few typos here and there you've done a great job with establishing a sort of base storyline here with this being almost like a prologue.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Long time ago, somewhere 15-14 centure B.C. there was strong and famous country-Kolkha in the east of europe. The king of Kolkha was Aiethi. He had two daughters and one san. One of the princess was Medea. Kolkha was very rich land, there were “rivers of gold” as greek historian says. But one day Kolkha`s richness was stolen by strangers. (1)
I think,(2) Everyone heared greek legend about “Golden Fleece”, which was stolen from Kolkha by greek Jason and Argonavts. But they can`t steal anything, without Princess Medea`s aid.
Spell check your work.
1. hit enter again please.
2. Everyone isn't capatilized. And really just spell check this.
Also, where is this going?
TNC