Swires

thanks for the credit! yeah, this was a joint plot idea between the two of us, that really never got used, but as far as im concerned, we re-wrote the ...

Thats right - all side with the one in power (joke) The third person is a really good idea. It may be worth doing as Fand says in order to ...

So in effect I only have to reply to stories which I like? Lets not go into the realms of silliness.

my topics = topics that I am involved with Constructive criticism in regards to what? When ever I critique work I have but one focus in mind - Is this ...

Thank you for the critique hunter. Much appreciated.

Hunter - Stop badgering my threads please. I feel that a single paragraph or "extract" as so many new members post are useless and a pointless waste of effort. How ...

Yes - I knew there was something wrong with it, I just corrected it wrongly even though my way sounds better than originally written.

Im not a fan of stories that cash in on cliches by making them comical. Because, in effect parody's are cliche in themselves. One person takes the mickey out of ...

No one has mentioned "colour" or "favourite" Me and bubblewrapped took some time out of our lives to write a review of your story. It would be nice to be ...

Yes I agree - different points of view straight after one another may annoy the reader. I have two strands in my book and they meet often. Perhaps write more ...

Got through first 1k Prologue The very first Chair of Wind and Darkness was not so very different than the one you might be sitting in now. It was very ...

Thanks again - that was most helpful.

Thankyou for the critique Elein. Much appreciated. Note: These are not chapters, they are scenes. Rosin /1 and Derren 1 could be put into a single chapter (example). I did ...

Oh dear, rhyme, rhyme, rhyme! It killed the story like the butcher of the somme. Try writing new stuff, forgetting about the rhyme - the rhyme here made it seem ...

Ok, tabris and myself excluded - this is a poor show of critiques. Come on guys, why were you confused? What did you like, what didnt you like? Your comments ...