Published January 17, 2007
Stupid humor but yet so funny,
just like a rat mistaken from a bunny,
The scratch and sniff sticker was invented by a geek,
imagine all the time he waisted all through out the week.
look at who invented the time machine,
what a fraud he was,
look at all the things he did and propably stiil does.
who ever thought of bubble gum you can chew for days.
willy wonka was a dork in many differant ways,
now look at robbin williams i doubt that he's on fire,
i don't think he's mutch to hott for brittney spears entire.
by annabanana
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stupid humor but yet so funny,
just like a rat mistaken from a bunny,
the scratch and sniff sticker was invented by a geek,
imagine all the time he wasted all throughout the week.
look at who invented the time machine,
what a fraud he was,
look at all the things he did and probably still does.
whoever thought of bubble gum you can chew for days.
willy wonka was a dork in many different ways,
now look at robin williams i doubt that he's on fire,
i don't think he's much to hot for britney spears entire.
...I took out all the capitals, just in case.
As far as the poem? It's senseless.
Capitalize the word 'I' and use spell check before you post anything, please.
Agreed with phorcys. The rhyme killed it.
But to the technical stuff, Capitalize the first letter of each line, and read over your work a few times for typos/errors before posting.
Oh dear, rhyme, rhyme, rhyme! It killed the story like the butcher of the somme.
Try writing new stuff, forgetting about the rhyme - the rhyme here made it seem random.