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A little random for my liking. However I did like the structure of it. The last verse was a tad cheesy for my liking :)

I dont know what this was trying to be, it looks more like prose yet reads like bull to be honest. Im not sure where this should go. Perhaps you ...

Yes it seemed a little unflowing for a limerick. A limerick should flow perfectly and add to the humour. I didn't like the concept of it at all because it ...

I also disagree with Chandi, I liked the "all" in there as well. I liked this poem and the meaning it had and it was a pleasant read.

I thought it was pretty good. It wasn't bad but there is a lot of work to do. I understand what Imp, Snoink and Brad are saying here, it seems ...

Ok, Ill write a story about an interesting character with no conflict. Lets see how far you get into it before you wish I was never born to write such ...

Well if it was only a beginning I still would critiscise it. The "Phonecall from girl friend" idea is very very cliche. I also think it is a very bland ...

I dont like this is all. - It does not flow -It does not digest well -It has little imagery in -There is no soul in this piece -What arte ...

Thankyou for the critique. Reading it again it translates to utter rubbish. I agree, this is a terrible poem but what could I expect from myself - its the third ...

I wrote it 3 years ago. Thanks for the feedback.

Yes I thought it could be that afterwards. I too enjoyed wingless spine - it did seem very angelic.

Ive just done a google of it and it doesnt appear to be any different. Stanzas and verses are the same, being English I probably call them verses because of ...

I also enjoyed this and agree witht he imagery of butterflies, its actually a sweet little poem. You are a little poetry chick you are. I like most of your ...

well its short and nice actually. I enjoyed it immensly even if it only took me 5 seconds to read it. Although I found it quite random, how is sorrow ...

Anyone else, This is the thrid poem I've written so feel free to rip it to shreds.