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*Thrash* Get another installment out.

Yeah I agree with that - the last line is kind of a "I am getting carried away" moment lol. Thanks for the comments.

An overdraft occurs when withdrawals from a bank account exceed the available balance which gives the account a negative balance - a person can be said to have gone "overdrawn".

Hi gyr. The first scene - It is very well written as always but if it was to be removed would it really matter? It doesn't seem to add anything ...

I could do with a more substanstial review of this, if anyone is willing. Also, more comments are welcome. (Sorry for bumping my work, but I just need more feedback ...

London / Street 391 / Number 4 Sandly tried to spit out the vicious smell of lead while he sat with his back to his cellar wall; hands (white) on ...

Thank you very much for your exceedingly helpful review. Yes, this aims to be a novel length word but it may turn out to be a novella depending on which ...

Its literary genius. The book is filled with a superfluity of meaning and symbolism that is just crafted so well.The themes are both chilling and interesting. Graphic? Where on earth ...

It was pretty disturbing in places, its not over-the-top scary but its scary enough.

Thank you DS. Anyone else any points to make? Some questions I have for readers: 1) The character of Sandly Limerick - endearing? Do you as a reader enjoy reading ...

Hi Wilde Charlie - Capital letters in poetry are not essential, I chose to remove most punctuation and capital letters for a thematic purpose - the commonness of nature and ...

Ive read the first one - boring really, I forced my way through it. It was just a string of non-connected events and the main character wasn't likable. Not a ...

Thank you for the comments hunter111. I agree with all of them and I'll work on changing them in the redraft.

I disagree about splitting this into two. Chapters can contain many, many scenes. YOu have two scenes in this chapter - there is nothing wrong with that. They would be ...

Orwell wrote "Animal Farm", not "Animal House" lol. Btw... Orwell wasn't a communist, I think you should know by both his books that he was critical of communist societies yet ...