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Re: Infamous Mathematics
Hi there Fantasy! Swiftfur here to review. This is a neat piece! I like the rhyming. You managed to pull it off without it sounding forced. Great job! Actually, I ...
May 7, 2015 -
Re: I am not okay
Hey there, Wings! First of all, this is a nice poem. I liked the different point of view on the subject. Even though I generally don't like these kind of ...
Apr 8, 2015 -
Re: random words
Hi there rawan! This is a really good piece of work here. However, I did notice a few mistakes. the lowercase i in the third paragraph, lines three, five, and ...
Mar 8, 2015 -
Re: Photograph Family
Wow. Incredible piece. I see absolutely nothing wrong. There are no grammar mistakes, no spelling mistake. Punctuation doesn't count, because songs (lyrics) are just like poetry. They don't need punct
Mar 7, 2015 -
Re: Colors
This is a nice poem. :) The only things that jumped out at me is that know and by look like they were supposed to be now and but. Besides ...
Mar 6, 2015 -
Re: Tainted Skies 1.2
This is amazing. It's a great piece of work. I only found one mistake. "A brown mare stood before me, a grey saddle caught in it's teeth." "As I breathed ...
Feb 11, 2015 -
Re: The hero of earth chapter 5
Hi there, Dragon. First of all, the story is cool, but the way you have it typed is killing me. "Fallow me." should be "Follow me." "Your not going to ...
Feb 8, 2015 -
Re: David Echoe - Prologue
Hey there Dustbunny! I just wanted to say that this is a really good prologue. I was a little confused, though. At the beginning, You said The Council of Adventurers ...
Jan 11, 2015 -
Re: .
Hi there, Lenora! This is a wonderful piece of work you have written. There is only one tiny spelling mistake in the second stanza, line two; "taking" should be "talking". ...
Jan 9, 2015 -
Re: He Will Not Yield Today
This. Is. Amazing. I love it! It captures all the trials and tribulations so beautifully. You make it seem as if he is not indestructible, but determined to make it ...
Jan 8, 2015 -
Re: A Monologue
Hi there, farahmasud. I can totally relate to this, being a misfit, having no earthly idea what to do with my life. This is a really good short story. The ...
Jan 8, 2015 -
Re: Tadashi is Here
Hi there, Nightcrawler! I loved the way you captured Hiro and Tadashi's personalities. It's kind of scary the way you described everything so perfectly. Are you sure you didn't write ...
Jan 6, 2015 -
Re: Forever There
Hey there, Windsailor! I thought this song was really good. The way you grouped the stanzas gave the entire song a flow. There are no spelling or grammatical errors, and ...
Jan 6, 2015 -
Re: Part 1 of Cryptic Nightmares
Hey kyraann. I like this piece. It puts into perspective the confusion of the character. The way you wrote it without even giving the character's name makes the reader experience ...
Jan 4, 2015 -
Re: What's
Hey there music! (Thanks for the like). First off, this is a wonderfully thought out poem that makes the reader want to sit down, pose like the thinker, and ponder ...
Jan 2, 2015
