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‘lo again. ^_^ Benu crouched inside his small house, it was far better than most peasants had. You have a comma splice here. This means that the two parts of ...

I can't see any problems with the tenses.

Thanks y'all for your reviews - they're all much appreciated. I'll be sure to check back on your advice when I come to edit this. ^_^ Work's finally begun on ...

All throughout this story you tell, rather than show. This is the wrong way round: showing, good; too much telling, bad. (Wikipedia has a pretty good article on 'show, don't ...

Thanks all, for taking the time to read reply. :)

Ooh, that was a strange - but very interesting - read.

hunter: Thanks for the review, dude. Although, 'had had' is grammatically correct for the tense I was using. ;)

^_^ Those were both really helpful crits. :) And I do believe I agree with everything you've both just said.

Everyone: Again, thank you all for your helpful crits. They'll help me when I come to edit this. :) Snoink: The reason Tess' character is rather strange, is because I ...

Everyone: Thankee uber much for all your reviews. ^_^ I don't want to edit this just yet - experience has taught me that if I start editting the first chapter ...

What I meant by hardback, was that they were origionally put on sale in only hardback format. I seem to remember the first three books being only softback when they ...

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Jiggity and flytodreams: Heh, well, the fantasy aspects start to leak into the story in the next couple of paragraphs. But I chose to cut Chapter 1 - for posting ...

Yes. And it is generally regarded that this sort of self publishing route (self publishing a book, which then comes to the attention of a traditional publisher) is actually harder ...