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Hey Oxara! Just to let you know, I read chapter one also, so I sort of know where this chapter is coming from. I'm just gonna jump right in. First ...

Yay. I guess I got what I wanted. Thanks! This was six years before the rest of the book, but it seems like less time has passed. Why would they ...

There are some things that are still confusing. The last few paragraphs were particularly confusing. I got the idea that the reader was supposed to understand who the "old guys" ...

Okay, this was better. There should probably still be more building in chapter one, but the humor in this chapter was obvious. I'm also confused about what Harry actually is. ...

Hey. I enjoyed the chapter. It seems interesting, but I have to let you know how confused I am. Your chapter is labeled as humor, but I couldn't find any ...

Yay! Fox won! I mean it was a bit obvious that he would, but that fight was really intense. I think that Gemini was way too sure of himself and ...

I like this story. It's very intriguing. I like the way you write your characters and dialogue. Most of the time my dialogue is rubbish. You had my attention from ...

I like this work. It's like a freestyle poem. It makes you feel things and think back on all those people you've lost. The idea was really great too, the ...

Hey! I'm just gonna jump right in. I like the way you structured the chapter. The first line is quite good and very intriguing. Overall, I think your story is ...

That makes a lot more sense. I was really confused about Fox and how he looked when I read he first chapter. I like how he showed someone his secret, ...

Again, I agree with Emma. Luminous Conflux is running its tournament terribly. But I feel like Emma should be more concerned about what to report to her superiors or more ...

I like how the story is set up, with a character introduction and then a fight. I have to say that I agree with Emma. "LC is a bunch of ...

Hey FantasyWriter! Popping in for a review. I like your story so far. It has a great plot and conflict. Unfortunately, I can't just tell you what I liked about ...

Good poems can have hundreds of interpretations and "Interior" was not an exception. as I read it, all these thoughts passed through my brain of what it really means, thoughts ...

The story is interesting. I like it. It's mysterious and compelling. But there are, of course, some issues that I feel the need to mention. When you revise this story ...