StoryWeaver13

First off, you have to work on the grammar and stuff a LOT, but that's okay, go through a couple times and you'll get all of that cleaned up. The ...

Do you care if I'm a little bit mean? Oh, I feel bad, but remember I'm only doing this because I think you have potential! BUT I don't think this ...

This is sad, but it was just a little weak...questions can do that to a poem. All the same, I think it was pretty relateable and emotional. One thing - ...

Cool, I really like this! Being a tomboy who's always struggled between fitting in and "looking like a girl" and being myself, this was completely relateable to me. In a ...

Haha, I was pleasantly surprised! Your voice sounds really natural, and even though it's 3rd-person and neutral it has an edge of personality that molds to the characters just a ...

Well it seems a little angsty, but the fact that it's based off of something real means a lot. And we are "young writers," I suppose, so why not express ...

Corrections in red, suggestions/things to get rid of in bold. All I know , is you were there, the n you weren't. Dad, where did you go? You just left. ...

This was really good! Sad to say, I don't really have any critiques, considering how well it's already been covered. And really, this doesn't need improvement to be a good ...

Dude, this was really cool (and I'm sorry if you're a girl, 'dude' is just my generic term). Well, anyway, your poem. This is pretty awesome, in my opinion. I ...

I agree with the first reviewer, the beginning was shaky but then it really took off, and the ending was cool. The further you got (and more morbid and twisted) ...

*Liked Haha, I really like this. It's cool, quirky, different, original. It has it's own unique attitude and edge. I think it could still be tweaked here and there, but ...

I think this was too short to really give us enough of an image or to really sympathize with or relate to the narrator's situation. It's just kind of average ...

I definately liked your first more than your second; the second just seems to be lacking a little, and I think the problem is because of the rhyme scheme you're ...

To me, the first fiew lines felt angsty. Passion is a meaningless, Empty, Wasted, Wasteful thing, I was thinking that the theme and feeling would only continue and leave you ...

I liked this. This sounds like something my dad would say, kind of "you get what you work for" ideology. But at first read it looks so simple, but then ...